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【参考范文】 Dear Li Hua, I feel very worried when I hear that you areaddicted to computer games. They will be harmful to you in many ways. To begin with, they will waste too much valuabletime which should be spent on your study or other beneficial things. Inaddition, playing games for a long time will do harm to your health, especiallyto your eyes. Worse still, some games are full of violence, which will beharmful to your mental health. Therefore I strongly hope that you can stay awayfrom them earlier. In order to live a meaningful life, you can read more goodbooks, take more exercise to build up or participate in some social activitiesto expand your horizons. Look forward to your good news. Yours, Lily 【解析】 1.题干解读：本文要求根据要点写一遍短文。首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求；再根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡平稳、自然流畅。 2.例文点评：本文时态主要为一般将来时。文章紧扣题目要点，内容完整，表述准确，语言的表述符合语法的结构，造句符合英语的表达习惯。 3.高分亮点： 短语：to begin with，do harm to，be full of，live a meaningful life 句型：when引导时间状语从句：I feel very worried when I hear that you areaddicted to computer games. that引导宾语从句：I strongly hope that you can stay away from them earlier. (责任编辑：admin) |